There once was a fox who was also a woman, or a woman who was also a fox, rather. She had been cursed by a jealous witch, forcing her to spend some time each day in fox form. She was really a very beautiful woman with bright eyes and a an alluring smile. Although she was very beautiful, she had a lingering musky odor due to the part of her life she spent as a fox. Because of this, she spent her life alone, choosing her fox form more often than her human form. Men could not stand her musky smell. She longed for love as well, and one day, she came across a lonely hunter which changed both their lives forever.
The fox woman had observed the poor hunter, leaving his house in the mornings to hunt and coming back home to an empty house. She felt bad for the man because she knew what loneliness was like. She thought she could make this man happy, and he could be the companion for which she was looking. She decided to give him a chance. She watched him leave his house one morning, and then she sneaked in and shed her fox-skin. She began tidying the house and washing the man's clothes and cooking him a meal. By the time the hunter came home she had turned his house into a warm, welcoming place- something he never thought possible. He was struck by her beauty instantly. She flashed him a smile when he crossed the threshold, confused by the situation but not scared. He saw her fox-skin hanging on a line in the washroom. "Is this yours?" the hunter asked.
The Fox-Woman in her Fox Form, online source
Looking ashamed, the fox woman simply answered, "Yes." She explained her story as the man listened intently. The fox-woman was worried he would send her away, but he only grabbed her hand and began explaining his own life story. She gave him the same amount of attention as she listened to him explain. When he finished, she flashed him that breathtaking smile that he had fallen in love with just hours before. She got up to serve him the meal she had made him, and the two ate dinner together, something that neither of them had done in years. The joy they both found in each other's company was beautiful. Once their meal was over, the fox-woman washed the dishes while her husband watched her, admiringly.
Once night fell, the fox-woman began to look worried. Her new man asked her what was bothering her, and she explained that she had to put her fox-skin on for three hours. She told him she would love if he would prefer, but he would not have this. The fox-woman put on her fox-skin and the two cuddled on the couch by the fire until she could return to her human form. The two retired to bed and lived happily ever after.
Bibliography: Fox-Woman from Tales of the North American Indians by Stith Thompson, link to online source
Author's Note: The original story tells of a hunter who comes home after an outing to his house being taken care of as if he had a wife, but he does not have one. So, he goes off on a fake outing to determine who it was who did it. He watches a fox enter and thinks it is just looking for food, but when he goes in to check, he sees a beautiful woman and a fox-skin hanging. So, they live together for a while, but the man can't stand her musky smell, so she leaves an never returns. I didn't like this sad ending, nor did I like the fact that the man was so shallow that he did not appreciate her efforts. So, I decided to make my story all about what matters on the inside. This is why I added the detail about the man having a deformity and gave them a happy ending.
I like the changes you made to the story. I'm glad they were able to find each other and have a happy ever after. There was one thing that I was confused about, you mention that they are getting to know each other and falling in love, then you call the hunter her husband. That part sort of confused me. I'm not sure if it was a mistake or not, but you might add a little bit more about it if it wasn't. This was a great story overall and I really enjoyed reading.
ReplyDeleteThe story was short and sweet! I like how you managed to take the original but put your own spin with it, as seen with how you created more backstory with the characters and explained why they lived in isolation. It made sense and I like that their loneliness somehow brought them together.
ReplyDeleteHappy endings are always nice! Good job.
I read this story too, and I hated the ending so much as well! I'm so glad you made it end better. I'm glad that I can concentrate on this version now. Overall, I liked your story although I would have loved a bit more of why the fox chose him and them actually falling in love. But I truly enjoyed this.
ReplyDeleteThe addition of the happy ending was touching. The story was short but got the major points across very well, which brings me to the next remark. It's nice that the story had an added message of "What's on the inside counts", as it seems that the original story didn't have anything like that, since the hunter kicked the fox woman out even after she did all that stuff for him.
ReplyDeleteYou are a great writer. This is the second story I've read from you, and it's great. I like the characters. They really great characteristics. I think the ending is my favorite. It is so warm and heart-felt. I might suggest adding in more dialogue to help your reader follow along better. But overall, a great job with this story!
ReplyDeleteI liked the subtle changes you made to the original story in order to make it your own. I thought the image you included in your story was very fitting as well because it brings out the highlight of your story. It was nice to read a warm story in which all the characters end up happy and they are accepted for who they really are.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you changed the original story into something a little happier. It was nice to read about these two people who had never had love, find love in each other. The original story sounds really sad, but I like your story much better. I was a bit confused about the timeline of the story thought. It seemed like they hadn’t known each other for long, but the woman refers to the hunter as her husband. Maybe more time passed that I realized.
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